Xem giúp em 2 topic này với ^^

thơ dại

Thành viên
Tham gia
5/11/2012
Bài viết
7
Topic 1: Living in a dormitory offers three advantages to a newly arrived foreign student. For a newly arrived foreign students, it is not easy to decide to live in dormitory or living in a boarding-house. There are three advantages in order to foreign students choose to live in a dormitory. The first of all is a security. Because you are away from your family and live in a new country, you are protected more than live in outdoor by the manage of the dormitory. Specially, you have roommates. You no felt alone, and if you have a any problem, you can share with them to relieve your sorrow, and they also give advices to you solve it. Unluckily, your health is not good, the roommates are “your parent”. The second is that you have more free time after class time. If you live in the boarding-house, you will be worried about something such as: foods, rent, etc .… and you have no more time to read books or review your knowledge. Finally, it is very advantaged to you go to school. Because the dormitory is inside a college precinct or be is nearly the college. Besides, students can set up learning in groups effectually. In short, that is three advantages to living a dormitory for a newly arrived foreign students.

Topic 2: The qualities of a good teacher.
In the future, I will become a teacher, so I think that I have to improve myself. For me, there are 3 qualities of a good teacher. The first is a knowledge, which is very important. It is not only profession skill but also life-knowledge – it is called “ life experience “. Because you teach them skills to exist in their social beside help them to improve their knowledge. The second is love. If you are deeply attached to your students, you can teach them well. You always listen and try to understand from the ones speak, and you share and help them if you can. The distant of relationship between you and your students is shorter. The last is a self-confident and a patent. For teachers have just been the first to teach, they often were easy to lose confidence. Because there were some mischievous children who can play not only their friends but also their young teachers. That makes you - young teachers- to be afraid of and if you are not self-confident ourself, you will not go on your lesson. Besides, a good teacher is a teacher who can help their students to pass difficult. Being willing to explain although you repeat these things one more time. A good teacher is a teacher who is willing to do necessarily anything for their students. In conclusion, to become a good teacher is not so difficult if you try to form these qualities.

​các anh chị ơi xem giúp em 2 cái topic trên với nha... các anh chị đọc thấy chỗ nào sai, ý nào viết chưa đúng , xin anh chị chỉ rõ và giúp em sửa sai với để lần sau em không gặp lỗi đó nữa... em cảm ơn các anh, chị nhiều ạ
 
Hiệu chỉnh bởi quản lý:
t ms đojc vài câu đầu của đoạn 2 mà thấy sai khá nhiefu chỗ
đầu tiên là to me chứ ko phải 4 me
"a knowledge" ko đếm đc neen ko có a

có thể thay life-knowledge – it is called “ life experience “. = life-knowledge called “ life experience “.
pần sau còn rất nhiều,
 
for me,.... : theo tôi, đối với tôi .... cụm này hay dùng mà????????????????:KSV@13:
 
For a newly arrived foreign students
=>
For newly arrived foreign students

There are three advantages in order to foreign students choose to live in a dormitory
=>
There are three advantages for foreign students who live in a dormitory

The first of all is a security. Because you are away from your family and live in a new country, you are protected more than live in outdoor by the manage of the dormitory
=> The first of all is the security because when you are away from home and live in a new country, the protection of dormitory is higher than living outdoor

You no felt alone, and if you have a any problem, you can share with them to relieve your sorrow, and they also give advices to you solve it. Unluckily, your health is not good, the roommates are “your parent”
=> You wont feel alone. If you have a any problem, you can share them with your roomates. They will give advices for you to solve it. If your health is not good, the roommates are “your parent”

The second is that you have more free time after class time
=>
The second is that you have more free time after school

If you live in the boarding-house, you will be worried about something such as: foods, rent, etc .… and you have no more time to read books or review your knowledge
=>
If you live in boarding-house, you will be worried about things like: foods, rent, etc .… and you will have no time to read books or review your knowledge

Finally, it is very advantaged to you go to school. Because the dormitory is inside a college precinct or be is nearly the college
=>
Finally, it is very advantaged for you to go to school because the dormitory is inside college precinct or near the college

Besides, students can set up learning in groups effectually
=> Besides, students can organise learning in groups effectually

In short, that is three advantages to living a dormitory for a newly arrived foreign students.
=> In short, that is the three advantages of living in dormitory for newly arrived foreign students.

 
The first is a knowledge, which is very important
=>
The first is the knowledge, which is very important

Because you teach them skills to exist in their social
=> ko hiểu ý câu này lắm
:KSV@08:

You always listen and try to understand from the ones speak, and you share and help them if you can
=>
You must listen and try to understand from their speak, share and help them if you can

The distant of relationship between you and your students is shorter
=>
The distant of relationship between you and your students will be much shorter

For teachers have just been the first to teach, they often were easy to lose confidence
=> For teachers who are teaching for the first time,
they were easy to lose confidence

Because there were some mischievous children who can play not only their friends but also their young teachers
=> Because there were some mischievous children who play not only with their friends but also with their young teachers

That makes you - young teachers- to be afraid of and if you are not self-confident ourself, you will not go on your lesson
=> That makes you - young teachers- afraid and if you are not self-confident enough, you will not able to go on your lesson

Being willing to explain although you repeat these things one more time
=> Being willing to explain although you have to repeat these things more than one times

A good teacher is a teacher who is willing to do necessarily anything for their students
=> A good teacher is a teacher who is willing to do anything in necessary for their students




 
ect...
sửa chung những lỗi cục bộ thôi =.= mà cũng chưa chắc sửa đúng đâu, bạn tham khảo thôi nghen :KSV@08:
 
For a newly arrived foreign students, it is not easy to decide to live in dormitory or living in a boarding-house.
It is not easy for a newly arrived foreign student to decide whether they should live in a dormitory or a boarding-house.

There are three advantages in order to foreign students choose to live in a dormitory.
In my opinion, living in a dormitory offers three advantages to them: security, more free time and team work with classmates.

The first of all is a security

Now here we come to the first, security.
Because you are away from your family and live in a new country, you are protected more than live in outdoor by the manage of the dormitory
Being away from your family and living in a new country, you can be defended by dormitory control/management better than living outside

Specially, you have roommates. You no felt alone, and if you have a any problem, you can share with them to relieve your sorrow, and they also give advices to you solve it.
In addition, you may have your roomates who will make you not to feel lonely, listen to your feelings and give some good advice to solve your problem/trouble.
Unluckily, your health is not good, the roommates are “your parent”
Furthermore, they will look after/take care of you when you are sick.
The second is that you have more free time after class time. If you live in the boarding-house, you will be worried about something such as: foods, rent, etc .… and you have no more time to read books or review your knowledge.
Having more free time after school is the second advantage. If you live in a boarding house, such things like foods, expenvise rental charges, etc will disturb your mind and you may have no time to read books or review your lessons.

Finally, it is very advantaged to you go to school. Because the dormitory is inside a college precinct or be is nearly the college. Besides, students can set up learning in groups effectually.
Last but not least, it is convenient for you to get to class since the dormitory is normally near to school. Additionally, students can work in group on school projects/homework
In short, that is three advantages to living a dormitory for a newly arrived foreign students.
In conclusion, there are three advantages to live in a dormitory for a newly arrived foreign student.

P/S: Ko rõ lắm ý/nghĩa của từ newly arrived foreign student là gì:KSV@19:
 
The first is a knowledge, which is very important. It is not only profession skill but also life-knowledge – it is called “ life experience “.
The first and a very important factor/element is Knowledge (uncountable noun) . Not only do you know how to teach your pupils/students, you also should have experience of life.
Because you teach them skills to exist in their social beside help them to improve their knowledge
You help them know how to integrate into community/society....
The second is love. If you are deeply attached to your students, you can teach them well. You always listen and try to understand from the ones speak, and you share and help them if you can. The distant of relationship between you and your students is shorter.
Secondly, love for your students....You always listen to what they want to tell, understand their feelings and help them. Therefore, you can shorten the difference of relationship between you and them.

The last is a self-confident and a patent. For teachers have just been the first to teach, they often were easy to lose confidence. Because there were some mischievous children who can play not only their friends but also their young teachers. That makes you - young teachers- to be afraid of and if you are not self-confident ourself, you will not go on your lesson. Besides, a good teacher is a teacher who can help their students to pass difficult. Being willing to explain although you repeat these things one more time.
Lastly, self-confidence and patience. Teachers often loose their confidence easily in their 1st time of teaching (?). There are naughty pupils who like teasing not only their classmates but also young/fresh-graduated teachers. Such annoying thing will make you,a young teacher, feel shy/nervous and loose your earlier confidence, then you cannot continue the lesson/class. Additionally, a good teacher have to be the one who help their students overcome difficulties and is willing to explain lessons to the children until they get the point.
In conclusion, to become a good teacher is not so difficult if you try to form these qualities.

So, it is not very difficult to become a good teacher if you try to meet the above....
 
Hiệu chỉnh bởi quản lý:
×
Quay lại
Top